For the Gold

gold country innNorthern California
, September 1857

I dropped my bags at the foot of the bed, but I couldn’t settle in and relax. We were on our way north to make our fortunes off the new gold strike by Redding, and we were lucky to have found this place. But something about it dampened my spirits.

Still, if we’d passed it by, it was likely more than our spirits would be damp. The sky was threatening a deluge, and our wagons were already crammed full with miners’ clothing and food staples. I was in no mood for a rude awakening in the middle of the night when the rain found its way past our improvised tent to my blanket.

“Going to turn in early tonight,” I told my brother George. Maybe I could just sleep through the uneasiness. We’d leave tomorrow morning, rain or shine.

“That’s right, Hal,” he replied. “The sooner we get there, the sooner we start getting rich.”

I nodded. We’d been here for the tail end of the big gold rush, but like most miners, we didn’t get rich at all. We got wet feet and sore backs and lousy food. But the merchants—well, if they weren’t rich, then they just weren’t trying. The prices they got were unbelievable. And this time we’d be one of them.

“Miners pay in gold,” George murmured as he climbed into bed, and I grinned.

“Gold dust, gold coins, gold nuggets…our days of scratching in the dirt for pennies are over.” With this comforting thought, I pulled the blanket up to my chin and closed my eyes.

I woke to what felt like a sharp shock of water down my back. I sat up, outraged at the icy chill, and gasped. Tendrils of fog were coming up through the floorboards.

I reached over and shook my brother. “George, wake up.”

He groaned and then froze. “What is it?”

“I don’t know, but I don’t like it.” I sat up, clutching the blanket to my chest. The room was freezing, far too cold for September. And the wisps were coming from the walls now, too.

George sat up next to me, and the fog reached for his head, spreading out like fingers of some ghastly hand. I waved my hand through it, and its touch was clammy. Even as it dissipated, another one formed.

“George, we’re getting out of here.” I threw off the blanket and fumbled for my pants. A tendril touched my arm, and I slapped at it frantically.

“No! Leave me alone!” George shouted, and wisps were now reaching for him from all sides.

I stuffed my feet into my boots, trying to ignore the feeling that I’d just stepped into a bog, and grabbed my shirt and jacket from the foot of the bed. We had to get out of here.

A hollow, grating laugh echoed through the room, and George screamed. “No, I’m going! I don’t have your gold! I hardly ever found any!”

But we did have a small sack of gold coins—all our savings in the world were in our two packs. And I could hardly see them now for the wisps that were writhing over them. I staggered over, tripping over things I couldn’t see. “This is mine, you damn ghost,” I shouted. My legs were swept out from under me, and I fell headfirst into the packs.

My hand groped and found a strap. It’s mine now, a voice echoed in my head.

“Like hell!” I stumbled to my feet, but I tripped forward and landed hard on my hands. The other pack was just to my right, so I grasped the strap and crawled.

I had no hands free to sweep the foggy fingers from my face. I moved my head back and forth, but their icy grip slipped down my collar. It froze me, but I had to keep moving.

“Where’s the door?” I shouted. The wisps were too thick to see through.

“Keep coming,” George called. “You’re headed the right way.”

You’ll never get out. The gold is mine, and you are, too.

I screamed and shoved a hand forward. The wisps now stung, like needle-thin shards of ice piercing my skin. I lurched ahead, and the floor turned to slippery ice. I landed on my face and the mocking laughter rang in the room again.

I felt a tug on the pack, and George said, “Keep moving, Hal.”

We crawled to the door. The cold metal doorknob was a promise of freedom beneath my hand. I yanked it open and pulled on George’s arm, who’d fallen behind me.

We staggered to our feet in the hallway. George looked shaken, but he slung his pack on. “I wasn’t sure we were going to make it out of that, Hal.”

I forced my pack straps over my shoulders and looked back into the foggy room. “I wasn’t, either.”

A tendril reached through the open doorway.

We screamed and ran, pell-mell down the passage. My feet were making my decisions for me–I wanted to be anywhere but here.

The floor buckled beneath our feet, and the stairs pitched back and forth. I fell three times but scrambled back to my feet right away. I had to get out of here. My feet were telling me I needed to go, go, go. I whimpered and hauled George to his feet at the base of the stairs. We headed toward the beautiful rectangle of freedom that was the open door. The sky was just lightening in the east.

But then the innkeeper blocked our path, the same one who’d taken our money earlier. “You must stay,” he said in a hollow voice, and I grabbed his shoulders and flung him to the side. He hardly weighed anything at all, as if he were made of paper. He landed on a table by the wall, and I didn’t look to see if he got up again.

I ran through the open doorway and down the steps. I made it several paces before I bent over, hands on knees, gasping. My panic was ebbing, and with it, my strength. My arms felt as rubbery as noodles, and my legs weren’t much better.

Looking back, I went weak with relief when I saw George right behind me. Then I raised my eyes to the building behind us.

Peeling paint covered empty window frames on either side of the gaping doorway. An oak branch had caved in part of the second story. Mold laced through the upper storey walls like fingers creeping across a bedroom floor.

I met George’s eyes. “Let’s get the hell out of here.”

Avid writer and reader of Faerie tales and noblebright fantasy.

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20 comments on “For the Gold
  1. Creepy creepy creepy. But also good good good. Will not be re-reading this one on Halloween. Maybe the day after.

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  2. adeleulnais says:

    Love it, really spooky and my heart was with them as they raced down those stairs.

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  3. 😀 😀 😀 I agree with Sharon and adeleulnais. There is nothing like chills and thrills to start off my morning. I probably lost a 1/4-inch of teeth. The ending reminded me of House of Usher. 😉

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  4. Thank you so much, ladies. It’s hard for me to write scary, which is why I’m practicing it. I feel sorrow and elation at the proper points in my story, but it’s extremely difficult to scare myself. Almost like cooking from a recipe something that you can’t eat. Perhaps that’s not the best metaphor, but it’s the closest I can come.

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  5. Grace says:

    Well that literally made me shiver. You really conveyed the panic well, very nice!

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  6. blondeusk says:

    You are such a good writer! Anyone who makes me shiver and feel on edge is a fab writer! Love it!

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  7. A story to send chills down one’s spine! Very well written, Cathleen.

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  8. I enjoyed that, though I’m not one to enjoy scary spook stuff! haha I loved the end how when they looked back they could see the place with different eyes. I wonder who the guy was at the door! 🙂

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  9. Congrats, Cathleen! You’re our Week 51 “Trace” Winner! 🙂

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  10. Hurray! Thanks so much, everybody. 🙂


  11. Congratulations! 🙂

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  12. Yikes… Well done!

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  13. This wasn’t my favorite. I feel like the story went from 0 to 100 in a millisecond. Because of that, I wasn’t really invested in what was happening. It began so realistically and then to incorporate magical elements threw me off.

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    • It’s one of the reasons I asked Rachael for a longer length. If I remember right, we topped out around 1500 words, and most of the time, I had to trim more than I’d like. Also, it was more of an exercise than anything else. I wrote maybe half a dozen ghost stories to try to see if I could scare people. I can’t scare myself. I can make myself cry or be happy, even laugh, but I can’t give myself a fright. So I was playing around with pure technique. It was something like cooking food that you can’t or won’t eat for some reason.

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